tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862377880119159157.post7428972673294038150..comments2012-09-21T09:41:06.101-07:00Comments on A Fair Voice in an Unfair Society: Waynehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11929170597761439761noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862377880119159157.post-9244098669836534622012-09-21T09:41:06.101-07:002012-09-21T09:41:06.101-07:00From a writing standpoint, you have quite a few gr...From a writing standpoint, you have quite a few grammar errors such as run on sentences in paragraphs 4, 5, and 6, misuse or lack of use of commas, repetitive application of the word "simply", and a lot of unnecessary wordiness. <br /><br />Another thing is the lack of clear organization. The reader has difficulty following your message, due to the jumping back and forth between your points. Your discussions, in relation to Brunnock's awakening of identity issues and self reflection, were vague. Would have been nice to hear more about the peeling "back the skin of somewhat buried complex issues, of one’s identity and oneself." Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com